Personal opinion about David's new story (just the archive entry's, don't panic)
David's new story is very lame, and gets ridiculous in the end.
First we have him getting much advice from his Barkeeper friend while he bleeds on the ground and none of the trasspassers gives a *mmmh*. That was an interesting kind of narrative when it started, but after the fifth one it got pretty boring.
It got interesting again when he got the courage to stand up and fight for his feelings, but an airport scene? Seriously? How much bad romcoms did you watch, dear author? An romantic ultimatum is always hard to Wright, but there is no expenditure what so ever.
Then the ending and o boy, that was awful. "oh no, I have been rejected by the love of my life. I feel so good, I can do everything. Oh no, a ghost is attacking me, now for some reason I feel ######### enough to be in the entity's realm."
What about the One actually reallavant thing in the WHOLE STORY. The reason, why any of this happened and why David feels so ######### up. The only actualy present part in his backstory: what did the referee said to him?
I did not actually had expectation about this whole thing, because I thought it to be a bad idea, but that is just poorly executed.